Talk:Don't Say Gay bill

Bias
"During Pride month" adds unnecessary bias when the date will suffice. The inclusion of this phrase leads readers to develop a specific opinion about the decisions made at this time. It os clear that the article derides the decision as a negation because the decision negatively impacts the queer community. By saying "during pride month", it draws attention to the time period (ostensibly a time wherein the lgbt community is celebrating) instead of focussing on the decision itself. This is exacerbated by the fact that the phrase appears as the very first thing readers read. It is given unnecessary prominence in the paragraph when it doesn't need or deserve it. In addition, the decision was made on a date, not during a time period. That is, it was a decision made on a day, not over a period of time. This phrase should be removed in the name of neutrality and semantic accuracy. 16:37, 16 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Indicating that anti-trans legislation was passed at the start of Pride month is important context, as is noting that the veto of Pulse-related funding was made days before the fifth anniversary. Various local and national news outlets made note of that timing, and LGBTQ+ rights orgs issued statements about it. Maybe if we restructure that section/paragraph to put the point later rather than first? Immi Thrax  (she/her) (message me) 12:17, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Tbh I just think the "during pride month" needs to be removed or moved. Perhaps my concern is rooted in the fact that, as you acknowledged, Immi, having it at the front makes it seem as though it is more important than the rest of the information. To me (an outsider whom this bill does not directly impact), having it first does not feel impartial. Moving it to later in the paragraph to acknolwedge the timing explicitly would sit better with me. Perhaps something along the lines of, "The timing of these changes to occur during Pride Month was criticised by several organisations"? Obviously with sources lol 12:23, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
 * That sounds fair to me! Immi Thrax  (she/her) (message me) 12:25, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Sorry it took me so long to get back to this, but I think that's a good change! My reason for wanting to keep some mention of it was based on the fact the media coverage around it and other events around that time period highlighted it. I think your proposed change is good. Supreme Emperor Holocomm 03:54, 20 March 2022 (UTC)